University of Washington: What is the hardest part of being a teenager now? What’s the best part? What advice would you give younger siblings or friends (assuming they would listen to you)?
Growing up and developing into young adults is an exciting, unpredictable journey. In kindergarten, we looked up to our parents and never wanted to let go of their hands. We told them about how our day went, and every little thing that had happened to us. By the time 5th grade came, we were begging them to let us sleepover our friend's house, or to go to the mall alone with our friends. Then, came our teenage years, better known as the rebellious stage. We stay in our rooms, only coming out to eat, and the main reason we talk to our parents is when we want something. We shop at the same stores, and buy things that we may not necessarily like, just for the name brand. Girls cake their faces with makeup and go on diets, so they can look like the models on the covers of magazines.
To me, the hardest part about being a teenager now is making the right decisions, and having to think about how my actions will affect my future. If I could, I would eat taco bell everyday, go to the beach instead of doing homework, and spend all my money at the mall. However, since I have my future to consider, I need to exercise a lot to stay in good shape, do my homework to get good grades, and save up so I can afford to go to college. Being a teenager, I also have to deal with a lot of peer pressure. I want to fit in with everyone, but I don't want to give into people's influence, especially if it's negative. I've been called lame for not wanting to vape with my friends, but I know that I'm making the right decision by saying no. I may not make the right decisions all the time, but learning from my mistakes is what helps to shape me into a better person.
The best part about being a teenager would have to be independence. When I'm not on the soccer field or the volleyball court, you can find me shopping at a mall, hiking, or tanning at the beach. After all, that's pretty much all I do here in Hawaii! At this age, my parents pretty much just let me do whatever I want, as long as they know what I'm doing and where I'm going. This is only the beginning of a new chapter in my life, because once I'm in college, they won't be there to worry or to set a curfew for me. Independence is definitely the best part about being a teenager, because it means that I'm finally growing up, and making the transition into a young adult.
If I were to give advice to my younger siblings or friends, I would tell them to choose their friends wisely. Friends have a really big influence on you, because often times you do whatever your friends do, so you don't feel left out or boring. If your friends make bad choices, then you probably will too. I've had the same best friend since kindergarten, and that's all you really need. Although it may not seem like it at the time, there is much more to life than being popular. Think before you act, and trust your instincts when determining what's right or wrong.
Your essay was good and I like how you describe how to make the right decisions and how it could help you in the future. Your essay needs more description to have independence will help you a teenager.
ReplyDeletePrompt-wise, I think you answered it well, with the answers they wanted. Each question is given their own paragraph, in essence, and I can see that with how each of them start. It's structured so as to allow readers to flow through with ease. There's just something that seems "left out" that takes the strength of the essay away, and essentially makes some parts of you seem somewhat forgettable. You have the cohesion that an essay like this needs, but the reflections seem "cliché".
ReplyDeleteFor example, nearing the end of the second paragraph, I'd phrase it like so;
Peer pressure is also one of the more popular things associated with teenagers, and I gotta tell you; it's real, and something we as teenagers have to deal with. Vaping--a growing activity individuals my age participate in--was something I've been pressured into before, but were I to join in and not be called "lame" for not trying it out, I would be relinquishing my ability to make the right decisions; something, as stated before, is one of the hardest parts to being a teenager.
Also, I'd try actually addressing the reader. It sometimes could work (as it did in my example above) and could potentially strengthen your essay.
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