To begin with, no tourism equals a high unemployment rate for the residents of Hawaii. "Tourism is the biggest generator of jobs among the major economic sectors, supporting 168,000 jobs in Hawaii. Many people rely on tourists so that they can keep their job. Places such as hotels and attraction sites also depend on tourists to stay in buisness. "For every $1 million spent in direct visitor expenditures, tourism supports 11.2 jobs." This shows that the amount that visitors spend affects the amount of job openings. If tourism decreases, so will the amount of money that they spend, which leads to less job openings. Hawaii relies on tourism to support their jobs.
Another reason why Hawaii is too dependent on tourism is because it plays a big part in their economy. "Tourism contributed to $1.5 billion in total state tax revenue in 2013, an incremental $30 million per year." Tax revenue is the government income due to taxation. Hawaii relies on tourism to bring in enough money to sustain their government. "DBEDT, the Depeartment of Buisness, Economic Development, and Tourism, expects tax revenues to increase by 2.8% in 2016." Hawaii's tourism is increasing annually, which means that they are expecting more vistitors. More visitors means more jobs and higher tax revenues. The tourism industry is continuing to grow as the years go by.
Tourism is by far Hawaii's biggest industry. "Hawaii's tourism industry generated $14.5 billion in total annual visitor spending, an average of $39 million per day." The amount that visitors spend each day contributes a lot to the overall economy. If the tourism industry suddenly dropped, Hawaii's economy would not be able to survive. "Today, tourists outnumber residents by a ratio of 6 to 1." That means that for every 1 resident in Hawaii, there are 6 tourists. There are more tourists daily than there are of people that actually live in Hawaii! Tourisms contribution to the local economy of Hawaii is really large.
In conclusion, the job oppurtunities, tax revenues, and economy of Hawaii highly depends on tourism to be able to continue growing. The amount of tourists that go to Hawaii, and the amount that they spend affects the amount of job openings. The tourism industry is expected to increase over the next few years, a good sign for Hawaii and it's residents. However, Hawaii is too dependent on the tourists. If something, such as major airline closures or the increase of prices were to affect the amount of annual visitors, Hawaii's local economy would struggle.
Kelci, Your essay is really clear and it got the purpose across. But I would recommend you making each paragraph a little clear on the purpose of that exact paragraph. For audience I feel that it adjust to each reader. For form you used terrerr which is good. I feel that your content is relative to your thesis, and that each of your paragraphs support your thesis. For conventions there are little to no spelling errors. I feel that you added a right amount of personal comments. Overall your purpose was clear and really informed me about the importance of tourism in Hawaii.
ReplyDeleteKELCI your essay contains a introduction that has a hook and it is not missing any thesis your conclusion contains fluency, and structure and it really supports your thesis. It really has a purpose. Information fills up the essay and it is good.
ReplyDeleteYOU NEED TO DISCUSS HOW EXACTLY TOURISM CONTRIBUTES TO THE STATES ECONOMY. YES, WE GET IT THEY SPEND LOTS OF MONEY. BUT HOW MUCH IS THAT COMPARED TO EVERYTHING ELSE. DISCUSSION THROUGHOUT ALL BODY PARAGRAPHS ALSO NEED TO BE STRONGER AND MORE COMPLETE WHEN IT COMES TO STARTING AND ENDING YOUR IDEAS. MS(3)
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